Pretty Crazy

Very interesting. I like how the narrator talks to you like he (or is it a she?) is actually writing this. I didn't see any spelling or grammar errors, but- ...

Yay! :elephant: Thanks for posting this early! Wow . . . I was literally sitting on the edge of my seat. It wasn't that suspenseful, but soooo interesting. I love ...

:lol: I like your writing style! It's very characteristic. Your idea looks original. But may I point out a few things? 1. Everything is a bit rushed, describing things will ...

Yeah! Now you're moving! This chapter was just as amazing as the others. I don't know how you did it, but somehow you managed to balance background stories and action ...

I like how you use the different senses in this poem. Sorry to say, the words don't flow, it's hard to get an image in your head when you read ...

Preface: I stood up and walked to the door. I was standing alone. All alone. I touched the knob and felt it's cool metal against my smooth hand. I took ...

We slept in circles this night, with a fire inside it. Wouldn't that sound better? It goes with the past tense better. I wasn't completely shocked when Kyran said he ...

It's a good idea. But it needs something to make it unique. There are all kinds of stories like this out there. Show us what you have that is different. ...

Hello. Me again. As usual, I don't have any criticism. But it's always nice to know people read your story. That was so intense, you could have made Ash try ...

Interesting. :) I remember the sequence where Aayla Secura dies in the movie. I like how you explained a little more about it before she was killed. Should I re-write ...

Everyone already said everything I could think of *pout*. I like your style, it's enjoyable and easy to read. I was always bothered by the fact that just because the ...

Every once in a while there is a story on YWS that is better than most books I've read. This is one of them. I don't have any nitpicks or ...

Not quite sure what to put. I really liked it. Your description was good, but now I'm confused. JB turned to look at Gage. “He’s completely undisciplined. He let his ...

This looks like it will be interesting. I kind of always wondered what it would be like for a Jedi during "execute order sixty six" I'm not a grammar expert ...

I love your writing style. For some reason, I find kidnappings interesting. And this is very interesting. Please write more soon! :D